I just read "May Day" by Heather Graham and ugh..
Using the wrong word somewhere right off the bat, mixing up names (there was one part where she kept putting the wrong name for Dr.__ and alternating right and wrong, and another where she put the pony's name where one of the girls' names should have been, the numbers 56 were stuck infront of a word somewhere, it was just awful.
It was also really all over the place at times and I had moments where I had no idea who was talking or being referred to and just yeahnothanks.
It's a bit of a shame because it could have been a really good story if written right, with more depth, less mistakes and better flow.