Dan the Man Portrait! (4th draft up!)

[kaylac713]

Edit: Ignore the first three drawings, find the last draft at the bottom of the second page. Promise it looks better than Sasquatch VVV

Please help me fix it. 8P



Btw... if you can guess who this is supposed to be... you'll make my day.

[XMegantronX]

his mouth is up too high and seems thin. eyes are huge. left side of the face is bulging.

there are probably a few more, but that's what i spot immediately ^^ good luck!

[Homeless Romantic]

I recommend putting it up to a mirror, or if you did it in photoshop, flipping it. This will help to see any proportions that are incorrect. But really nice job so far =)

[peanut butter fruit loops]

looks like Daniel Radcliffe and the shading on the right should be darker, though I get that the light is on the side, but the left is a little to intense

[kaylac713]

XMegantronX

his mouth is up too high and seems thin. eyes are huge. left side of the face is bulging.

there are probably a few more, but that's what i spot immediately ^^ good luck!

You're so right. I do that every time. (giganzo eyes and small mouth) I'll get to work on fixing that. cool

Homeless Romantic

I recommend putting it up to a mirror, or if you did it in photoshop, flipping it. This will help to see any proportions that are incorrect. But really nice job so far =)

Thanks! I did flip it a few times and I could tell that things were off, but I was having a hard time pinpointing them. Hence, picture post. cool hehe.

PeAnUt BuTtEr FrUiT LoOpS

looks like Daniel Radcliffe and the shading on the right should be darker, though I get that the light is on the side, but the left is a little to intense

You got it! It makes me feel better that he might have at least an infinitesimal likeness to Dan the Man... cool
But you're right. The shading is absolutely off, mainly because I originally started trying to shade the way I would with a pencil - completely forgetting that I have dandy digital tools like airbrushes for that. I was planning on redoing the shading completely after fixing everything else.

Thank you guys for the critiques, mind if I quote you when I post the second draft to show how much it has - or, God forbid, hasn't - improved? wink

[kaylac713]

XMegantronX

Homeless Romantic

PeAnUt BuTtEr FrUiT LoOpS

It's still not quite right... Improved a little... but not right still...
I hate the lips. Re-did them 20+ times... I probably just need to step away for a bit... urg.
At least he looks less like Sasquatch...



Also... by making sure to flip the picture back and forth often... I've discovered...
I draw ridiculously slanted... always. Ways to fix this???

[ii Stamper]

updated version looks less like Dan.

[Metal Gear Ginger]

Did somewhat of a repaint and an explanation:

[kaylac713]

Metal Gear Ginger

Did somewhat of a repaint and an explanation:

Thank you. This is exactly what I needed to see what I was doing wrong and how to fix it. I really appreciate your help.

[kaylac713]

XMegantronX

Homeless Romantic

PeAnUt BuTtEr FrUiT LoOpS

Metal Gear Ginger

Sorry if you guys are tired of me quoting you... But I really wanted you to see this last one - Especially you, Ginger. You have no idea how much your critique helped me.

I've always been told the whole "forms are not made of lines" thing... But I've never been able to put it into practice until now. Something finally clicked and I realized what I needed to do. So here it is...

Take 3 - with the photo I was referencing beside it.



You can click the drawing for a larger view.

So... thoughts?

[peanut butter fruit loops]

The eyes are small in comparison but it's looking much better

[kaylac713]

PeAnUt BuTtEr FrUiT LoOpS

The eyes are small in comparison but it's looking much better

Thanks! cool

[XMegantronX]

this looks soooo much better! nearly just like him. i don't think there's much to tell ya other than with a bit more practice and work, you'll have it nailed. congrats!

[Vine Tabris]

Not bad, but I would work on contrasts. Meaning you should add a wider range from black to white in your image. Your image currently has a lot of mid gray, so it needs more contrast to make it have more depth and look more three dimensional. You can see that the brightest areas are around the forehead, nose and cheek, while the darkest areas are around his eyelids, neck and the bottom of his nose. Don't forget to take into consideration the secondary light on the left side of his neck and face.

[kaylac713]

XMegantronX

this looks soooo much better! nearly just like him. i don't think there's much to tell ya other than with a bit more practice and work, you'll have it nailed. congrats!

Thanks! You're right, there's still some tweaks to be made. But overall, I'm much happier with it than I was before. Just gotta keep workin on it!