Until the end i cry.

• Artist: Jin4444
• Description: I made this poem on the top of my head so i don' t think its that good to win but oh well...^_^
  * shinigami = death god
  
  i made this off of a haiku i had for english class but i thought i haiku might be too short to get the interest of the voters so i hope you like it ...
  
  I take constructive critizisem and comments to improve my poem making.
  
• Date: 01/26/2010
• Tags: tears death love rain longing

Tears drop down like rain,
from my eyes to the ground.
I've never felt such saddness
in my life.
Forever,
I will never forget
The day you said you loved me,
but left me in agony the next day.

My tears continue to drop,
down to the ground they go.
Never remembered by anyone,
but myself.

Longing for my days to end,
where the death god comes,
and takes me away.

How long i've waited,
for peace to come.
The day is here
my silent death,
unknown from others.
my tears stop.
Everything stops.

My peace,
is your hell,
you were my world,
you were my everything,
you are my shinigami

Comments

[Vincent Hyde Vago]

i dont get the stanzas

[Jin4444]

lol thanx...XD

[Tomas Youngblood]

cool poem, its pretty good. reminds me of a few of mine. 5/5

[Jin4444]

@lulaby lol no i'm not depressed and ya i just felt like writing a sad poem

thouhg i'm surprized you found this poem only after a couple of minute when submiting it...O_O

[xo angelic lover xo]

lol i heard from lulaby.....its nice..lol....later tell me how the haiku goes i want to compare it...XD

[my_lulaby]

lol its nice though are you really depressed or are you felt like writing a sad poem then and there.....

[Jin4444]

in the second paragraph i ment,

i made this off of a haiku i made for english class but i thought a kaiku might be too short to get good votes. I hope you like it