The Darkness is LIght

• Artist: Aaron_wuz_here
• Description: Well the title describes it all. Its about find your way out of the darkness and into the light.
• Date: 08/25/2009
• Tags: darkness light

ICookiezzI is speaking..



I am trapped in the darkness
Trying to find my way out
I'm trying in the darkness hoping to find light
Trying to find light just like a light house shines bright
I walk alone in the darkness
Not knowing where i'm going
I begin to turn
Wondering if Ill ever learn
If this darkness becomes light
I walk further and further through the darkness
To indeed see.....
That darkness does become light


ICookiezzI has spoken..[/color]

Comments

[Lucetta Dianella]

You build up the poem with these feelings of isolation and desolation, but you end very confusingly. I don't see how your idea is transferred. Normally I wouldn't nitpick titles, but I'm pretty sure it's a typo, not an intended artistic expression. My advice? Rewrite, and don't format your poem with useless color and the soandso was here thing. That detracts from your poem. 1/5

[Pure_Celestial_Snow]

lovely

[Aaron_wuz_here]

Please vote for me xD