Mortality

• Artist: zarintha
• Description: I've got a lot of mortality, life, and death on my mind.
• Date: 06/25/2009
• Tags: mortality

Mortality

Sweet air one day,

Nothing the next.

A dark Sunday,

They buried their beloved.

So short a life,

So sweet a girl.

Her life ended with a knife,

Tears fall unchecked.

They all wonder what mortality truely is.

Comments

[Hiraetha]

*truly
and the eighth line is off-rhythm.

Other than that it's a mediocre poem. The first tthree lines have some decent imagery.