Revolution,Redefine.

• Artist: _Roooose_
• Description: Comment
• Date: 01/16/2009
• Tags: revolutionredefine

Take me somewhere deep

And unburden me

Disassemble, Incomplete

Silently a masterpiece

Sew imagination

Reaping Vindication

Sunlight for the soul

A thought on which to grow

No more body,

Only mind

Sooner we look,

Sooner we find

Revolution:

Redefine.

Comments

[Cottoncandyocbra3]

Reminds me of a few of my more abstract pieces. Again, I enjoyed it.

[Kibroth]

Particularly enjoyed the fragmented nature of this one as it lent itself to the over all theme(s).

Suggestions: Add "...as if to keep" and remove "and" from line 2; Exchange Sew for Sow (theme again); add "The" to line 11 & 12.

All that aside, I still loved this poem. 5/5

-K