bloodz

• Artist: country boy1234567890
• Description:
• Date: 10/29/2008
• Tags: bloodz

ashes to ashes
dust to dust
knock a crip in the
lip and make him bleed the
true color.

Comments

[BattleStarPicketFence]

And you could have used commas and capital letters. And take out the z. It's kinda barbaric. I think you have potential. Keep writing! smile

[Kateryna of Kyiv]

Gang poetry? For real dog?

You could have ended this better then "make him bleed the true color" use something to make it rhyme. Then you may have something cute to chant wile you go out and bust a cap in someone.