Happy Nowhere Village

• Artist: MattMarvel
• Description: story bout crazyness!!!!!!!!!!!
• Date: 05/02/2010
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once upon a time, there was a happy village in the middle of nowhere named.....uh?...Happy Nowhere Village. whee Everyone who lived there would be so happy and kind. But close by in the city junkyard live Chuck the dark wizard guy with his loud mouth dog Benjamin. Chuck was never invited to any parties because he was pure evil (Chuck throws Benjamin off 10,000 ft junk mountain). Chuck was also a 800 lb gaint who had bad breath and oral gum disease (because he didn't floss). Well... One day Chuck comitted suicude. eek eek , just kidding, Chuck decided to cast a evil spell on Happy Nowhere Village, but everyone there looked so happy he change his mind at the last minute. Instead, Chuck turned their man- made lake into solid gold. Which made Chuck happy and the villagers even more happy. The villagers toke the gold to bulid bigger homes, buy eletrontic devices from the future, got Chuck new gums, and got Benjamins vocal cords removed. whee whee And everyone live happily ever after,............. that was til frogger came to town....?

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Comments

[iUNHOLY]

) It could be a lot longer, and more serious (i.e, better) than it is. And you could seriously improve upon this. If you take creative writing classes, get out of that and write something more serious because personally, I, and a bunch of friends who are with me, find this rather silly and pointless. I'm rating it 1/5. There isn't any point in taking it higher, it'd be unnecessary to give you credits for something pretty bad.

[iUNHOLY]

Cut out the smiley faces. And the huge amounts of periods and brackets, they're unnecessary. The first time I saw that first emote it already put me off. You don't need pictures to have a great story, so I suggest that you edit this, take out all of the periods and the emoticons and the brackets; otherwise it looks messy, and like a five year old wrote it. Also, you need to improve on your writing. This type of writing is just unappealing,and I know this is not just a personal opinion, trust me-