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- | Submitted on 12/05/2009 |
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- Title: Sarayi Anat
- Artist: redwhispers
- Description: Beginning of a story. I was in the moment. Please tell me what you think. Sorry about the cussing and the ***s lol. I forgot that it would do that. If you can please work around it.
- Date: 12/05/2009
- Tags: perverted guns funny sexual arguing
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Comments (6 Comments)
- Random Nobody 13 - 08/10/2011
- Very good. I like the pace and it's far superior to some of the other "stories" I've read today.
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- Whispersoftheblood - 12/06/2009
- This is redwhispers author of Sarayi Anat.
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- Whispersoftheblood - 12/06/2009
- Sadly my account was hacked so I will be adding more through my new account which I'm using to post this comment. If any one is wondering about that. Lame hackers.
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- Lightly_Amorous - 12/06/2009
- I like it. Your characters are refreshingly unique, at least from what I can tell from this little bit. I like the pace and action in the beginning, despite what the person commenting before said. Your description of teenage-male thought process is spot on, if you ask me. xD
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- OminousCloudInDaDistance7 - 12/05/2009
- That was pretty good. I like the charactors a lot, but it was kinda rushed. One second she is running in holding a pistol, and the next she was putting it down his pants. If you added more detail in between those scenes, I think it would be a lot better. Check out my book!
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- RinaOfTheDead - 12/05/2009
- Ahaha. Good story. Needs a bit of refining though.
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