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- | Submitted on 11/14/2009 |
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- Title: I'll Close My Eyes
- Artist: Daddy Got This Account
- Description: no need for a description, poem explains it all. no, my mom did not die. she is alive. i just.. i've had this expierence with my friend and decided to write in in my perspective as if it were happening to me.
- Date: 11/14/2009
- Tags: close eyes
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Comments (2 Comments)
- onionio - 01/30/2012
- I like the concept and your rhythm was decent but it could be improved. There were quite a few spelling and grammatical errors though, and they became very distracting. I suggest you proof read and work a little more on the rhythm. smile
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- 290DarkStars - 11/17/2009
- . . . Im speachless, trying to hold back my moist eyes, Man, that was beautiful. It makes me cry thinking about innocent death, even when its so simple. 5/5. congrats Luna, your friend should be proud.
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