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- | Submitted on 03/01/2009 |
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- Title: Scared
- Artist: redwhispers
- Description: I just wrote this. Um. Its about someone fighting and running from some robbers that are in their house. Um.....yup. Its a thriller. Tell me what you think.
- Date: 03/01/2009
- Tags: thriller scary
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Comments (4 Comments)
- the dead of night - 07/06/2010
- i really like it, and its very easy to be drawn into, wich is good. but you should work on putting sentances where they should go, because there were a couple that distracted me enough because they had no relevency to that part of the story. and i would work on sentance structure. theyre all just statements of whats happening. try throwing in a couple of questions, or just make it seem more... complex. also, the plot was veyr simple. try mixing it up a bit
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- Bliss i n O B L I V I O N - 06/27/2010
- Is it a girl or a boy, because I think that depending on who's perspective it's from, it'll change the over all emotion. If it's a girl, it would be more about a girl being able to overcome the idea of being weaker than a male attacker, where if it was a boy, he was trying to find the inner strength every man is born with. Either way, I'm just curious if you had a gender in mind. It was very good though. =)
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- Savior_ofunsafespirits - 03/22/2009
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You should put in more details. Maybe you should change it so that the robbers get to her first and she still has to get away, or something.
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- Stretchy12 - 03/06/2009
- This is a great story but the happy ending comes to soon.
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