- by WerewolfAngle |
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- | Submitted on 01/24/2009 |
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- Title: Claws
- Artist: WerewolfAngle
- Description: this is an excerpt of a book i am writing. i am new at writing so ALL advice is happily taken. thank you for reading it is about humans who aren't realy human. and about a girl who once knew exactly who was an enemy and who wasn't is now unsure who she should trust anymore.
- Date: 01/24/2009
- Tags: clawstransforming
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Comments (4 Comments)
- xXSquirellflightXx - 01/31/2009
- thats great! The only suggestion I have is to work on building the scene and suspense a little more! Other than that your a natural! Also could anyone check out my story I just wrote? But your story is really good continue it!
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- Cthebookworm - 01/29/2009
- Pretty Good! But I am not trying to be mean But a little work on your gammer and you will be good.
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- yotobari288 - 01/28/2009
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very nice cliffhanger, there!!!
Just work on grammer and try to go a bit more in depth in your book. otherwise, nice work! - Report As Spam
- Lemongirl77 - 01/24/2009
- I think it's a great story, but "the hands of death" is a little too much unless you mean it to be a clever twist, in which case you need to explain it a little more. Check the punctuation, and then add some more because I want to know what else happens!
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