- Title: Park Games
- Artist: Echonance
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Description:
A boy and his grandfather.
I appreciate critique, so please tell me what I can do to make things better, for the next time.
If you would like some more of my work, feel free to pm me. Unless it is a huge piece, I will not require any fees.
Also, vote fairly.
Thanks for reading!
Pm about the ad. - Date: 12/31/2008
- Tags: park games grandfather
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Influx Efflux - 10/25/2010
- A nice glimpse into the relationship between grandfather and grandson. I enjoyed the interaction between the two, and the use of 'thump' and 'click' to break up the scene. Good character portrayal, and enjoyable to read.
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- Honey Salmon - 10/15/2010
- Not only am I a big fan of the game chess but I think its a romantic past time. This is a very cute little story, it's even somthing I would like to see more of? I've been planning a roleplay inspried by the game and this is deff a muse and a boost of creative thought. Very warm and relative good job :3 5/5 rating.
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- Shameless Allure - 10/07/2010
- Amazing story. ;3
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- icethefuhrer - 03/26/2010
- The story's great, but I think you need to leave spaces between each paragraph. But again, the story's simply amazing. Very touching, indeed.
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- Eldyna - 07/05/2009
- Nice.
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- T-eye-ger - 02/27/2009
- I like how you used the clock to move from scene to scene. Great job.
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