- by xXRoseBerryXx |
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- | Submitted on 07/21/2008 |
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- Title: The Shadow
- Artist: xXRoseBerryXx
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Description:
This was demonstrating on how the life of the
spirit world and that can haunt your life.
It was showing the life of demons
who rome around the earth scaring others.
Please comment :] - Date: 07/21/2008
- Tags: shadowdark
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Comments (6 Comments)
- MagicalAngelofLove - 11/02/2012
- Loved it
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- Its_a_Kiki_thing - 07/21/2008
- ok?
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- Atheshya - 07/21/2008
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Finish the poem, write about what happens after the last line. Asides from that, the only other unenjoyable thing about this poem is the tense change toward the end - you were consistantly writing in present tense until the line 'The boy was too scared to even take a peek.' Change the word 'was' to 'is'. Do the same for the other past tense lines.
Aside from that, I really liked it. It's very stream-of-conciousness, which is a good thing, in my opinion. - Report As Spam
- reapersuns manfriend - 07/21/2008
- Always start writing when it's still fresh on your mind so you can get the same concept down, and not be lost within your poem on where to go next. I'll be looking forward to seeing your poem completed. ^_^
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- xXRoseBerryXx - 07/21/2008
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it was late at night when
i wrote it ^^; so i guess
i didn't have time to finish it - Report As Spam
- reapersuns manfriend - 07/21/2008
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I enjoyed it completely, until the very last line.
It was kinda disappointing to see the poem with a question at the end. It shows the writer's lack of creativity, and gives me an unfinished poem to read. - Report As Spam
